Second Storyboard for timing session

This is the storyboard i will be showing at my timing session tomorrow, i'm still not 100% on my ending, not sure if I've just cut it off rather than really though about the ending.

I've taken out a few parts that i didn't feel fitted in with the story, i'm more confident with the story now, just as i said before then ending and possibly the transitions of the little girl running through the corridor towards the end of the piece. But i shall see what they say tomorrow about it.